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Kayko Sagouro
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 Posted: Sun Oct 21, 2007 5:21 pm Post subject: Little blurb.. |
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I just wanted to post this so that those who don't know me (practically everyone) could get a feel for my RP style.
A bitter cold settled onto the frozen tundra, biting through the thick fur cloak, chilling it's owner to the bone. Gale-force winds sifted a mixture of snow and grit under the hood. The figure looked to the stormy, gray skies, shuddered, and continued on it's grueling journey.
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Just as the blizzard let up, a lone traveler stumbled into a deserted city. The normally crowded streets were hushed as the last of the snow settled upon the buildings and frozen ground. The figure limped it's way to the nearest inn and attempted to wake the owners. It could hear the knocks turn into a rolling boom as it resonated through the empty rooms and halls. Another knock, another rumble; nothing. The traveler sighed and continued to the next inn, hoping against hope to receive an answer, and, maybe, a warm bed to sleep in on that cold night.
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Sejimaru
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| Posted: Mon Oct 22, 2007 1:24 am Post subject: |
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hmm, ur style sounds cool to me.
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Kayko Sagouro
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| Posted: Thu Oct 25, 2007 9:39 pm Post subject: |
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**is thoughtful**..it's more serious than most of the people i know...
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Locke
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| Posted: Thu Oct 25, 2007 9:41 pm Post subject: |
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Personally, it's better than a lot of the work I see on this site. (No offense, guys- this is superior writing). I'll have to put up a chapter or two of the book I'm working on sometime.
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Nerameshu
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| Posted: Fri Oct 26, 2007 12:44 pm Post subject: |
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No offense taken Locke. Personally, I lack the small details in my writing. I seem to forget about them if it's not in our roleplay.
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Sejimaru
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| Posted: Fri Oct 26, 2007 11:56 pm Post subject: |
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lol i don't like being to serious in my writing, it takes to much thought which takes out the fun, but everyone has their own style, so as long as the grammar is correct and its understandable, no one (Not even Locke XD) has the right to criticize or say that someone else's style is wrong.
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Nerameshu
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| Posted: Sat Oct 27, 2007 1:07 am Post subject: |
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So we can still criticize you? XD
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Sejimaru
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| Posted: Sat Oct 27, 2007 3:21 am Post subject: |
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noo nera, my grammar is getting better and my style is understandable.
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Locke
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| Posted: Sat Oct 27, 2007 11:15 am Post subject: |
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Do you want me to list all of your grammatical errors in the post before Nerameshu's? They're quite common there. You've improved, true, but you've got a LONG way to go.
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Sejimaru
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Well if i'm getting better, what's the prob? can't u just give a straight compliment? dang man.
and i do not have a LONG way to go thank you very much.
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Nerameshu
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You're right Mass. The way is not LONG. It's just a bit longer than most other people's way to grammatical correctness! XD J/K man.
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Kayko Sagouro
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| Posted: Thu Nov 01, 2007 7:08 pm Post subject: |
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xD! You guys are ruthless! But, yaknow Mass, a little constructive criticism never hurt anyone..
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| Posted: Thu Nov 01, 2007 10:10 pm Post subject: |
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You think your writing is serious? Man, if I didn't insist that my writing be funny in some way, you would think I was emo from the stuff I write about.
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Nerameshu
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Does it involve razors? And wrists?
XD
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Plato2
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No, it's more to do with how absolutely screwed the human race is.
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Nerameshu
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So it deals with a giant razorblade poised right over the planet Earth? lol
You have my email. Please send me a sample.
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Kayko Sagouro
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my definition of serious was nothing to do with being emo, or cutting wrists, or anything else like that. i define it as well, what you saw. not un-funny, but..well, i asked my GF and this is what she said:
"Serious but, again, with that light touch of humor. It isn't completely dark, yet it isn't completely off the wall stupid."
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Plato2
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I didn't say serious meant emo. It's just my writing would be so serious it would be depressing if I didn't include humor. By the way, are you a girl or a guy?
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Nerameshu
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Plato? Are you forgetting the basic rule of Internet Safety? The one about never revealing personal details? Unless you're a... LOL!
INTERNET PERV!
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Kayko Sagouro
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**burst out laughing and ends up twitching in a coughing fit** nah, it's fine, i feel i can trust the people i RP with, which is probably a bad thing...eh, but yeah, i'm a girl, and yes, i have a girlfriend. you're some of the lucky few that i've told because i feel that you won't judge me or freak out or something..
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